I'm usually not into linear VNs, but you've developed quite the story here. It's longer than other linear VNs I've played already and it's just the first chapter. Definitely looking forward to Chapter 2.
Interesting to say the least! Though a small bit of critisim. The story so far is rather stuck in the main character's head. Having the main character tell the players how they think or feel isn't a bad thing per say, but it's one of those things that can really bog the story down if your not careful. The story is already kind of exposition heavy right now, so adding the additional internal musing kind of slows the pace down a bit too much. It's fine if you want to make a main character that is thoughtful, just make sure that the main character gets pulled out of his own head fairly regularly. In fact it could make for some good character dynamics if you want to pursue it.
I'll take that into account. It's a tough thing to balance, however Reamus is his own character. He will have his own opinions on what happens in the story.
It's been a few days so I could be misremembering, but doesn't Alen actually notice the MC kind of spacing out in his own head? I thought there was a line about that. So it seems like it's a personality trait rather than overexposition.
Well, hopefully you can find something useful in there. I could always write a more detailed review later, after I finished, just so you know. ;)
I don't know for how much longer the game goes on, but I had to write it now. This could possibly be the best written visual novel, I've ever read. No Joke. Everyone knows Tennis Ace, Echo, Extracurricular Activities, Morenatsu, Repeat, Adastra, maybe WSSAP (Wolfstar Sins and Paradise) too and many more ...So, after having read the fate of Reamus for a while now, I'm pretty much certain [Pervader] takes it up a notch. The story flows along, draws you right in and is just really captivating.
I wonder, if you can beat Major\Minor to it. That game is indeed a visual novel, though there's no romance involving the protagonist. The speciality lays in it's relatively dark (not as dark as Echo, as a way point), fantastic fantasy story.
Well, back to your game. I simply love it, and think about supporting you on Patreon, like I have done and do for a few other visual novel creators.
If you can keep up the quality of the writing, that I believe you can, then you are on making something magnificent. The premise is at least as good as, and reminds me of Project Aego, for some reason. A game, which is no longer in development sadly. Now that I braught PA up, I have to ask. Is Pervader going to be a horror game, or have horror elements? I actually like horror to some extent, but please... No more Echo-like horror! (And there's even a prequel *shudder*) I would go so far to calling it on a similar level frightening, as Lovecraftian horror, because there's no hoping of a better future either, so to say. Although, Call of Cthulhu is a great game. And yes, I also like Lovecraftian, a lot, but not with romance... A happy ending is a must-have in a love story, don't you think? If there's one good one then there can be as many atrocious one's as needed.
Wait, Ahh I see. A comment down under spoilers it. In the end, I don't have to ask at least. ^^
I can't believe I've got so lucky, to have found Pervader, when it was launched only a day ago... You honestly should make this pay to play, but the fact you don't makes the game propably even better for most.
~from Germany, as we say: I wish you success! (not luck, or let's say both, if that sounds better)
PS: Everyone in search for more visual novels of the same kind, look on my profile. It has pretty much all good furry VN's itch has to offer. ;) (Of course there are more outside of itch, some I do know of as well) Tell me, should I have missed some.
I still have to play tons, tons which can only be played on a pc, yeah....
Discovering new, better VN's doesn't make sense to you? Mind your own business, thanks... I mean what I say, and I never lie! (Only people, who lie, would not believe me) Maybe I do exaggerate sometimes, but I am honestly hyped for these games. Many show a great amount of potential. With this one having the most, in my opinion, because it's not the typical highschool VN. I used to read absolute tons of books, so I know what I'm talking about. The longest book series I read is also the longest science-fiction book series, with 144 books currently. Name's Perry Rhodan.
Yes, this I admit. Although, Pervader is so well written that it's astonishing. More dialogues, as one of the other commenters mentioned, is the only thing that needs adjustment. Btw, out of all the about 30 VN's I played, Pervader really seems to be the best written one.
This was one of the best demos I've ever played, and I've played lots. The writing was superb, the backgrounds were masterfully drawn (at some point I couldn't tell if they were pictures or drawings!) and the chracters are all nicely written and designed. I hope this project grows. I suggest adding expressions (but perhaps you're already working on those?) And considering that you're working on this alone, this is a top-notch beginning. Keep going, dude.
This promises to be a masterpiece. The very concept summed on this page is captivating enough to me but the actual game makes it all sound more interesting and real in some sense. It comes to show how much thought you've put into this project over the years.
The fact you're doing this all by yourself... huge props to you. Your art style is really good, both for characters and background. You really set the ambiance and mood of the scene with your use of colors. Hell, even the music selection is good! The way you redact and unfold the story just caters to me in so many ways too.
I'm hyped for what's to come. You've got me this engaged with just the first part of the first act and honestly? I can't wait. I'll definitely support you financially as soon as life permits me to.
I just played through the current version, and I haven't been so engaged in a VN since I found Repeat, which is my currently my favorite VN of all time. Really hopeful for this and can't wait for the future of this. If I could support you financially right now I 100% would.
1. So far this build is SFW, but things will change in the future.
2. It's mostly linear in that it follows one main plot thread. You will be asked to choose either of your companions as your interest, at which point the story diverges for one chapter and comes back together. Afterwards there will be slight variations to the story based on your route and a few other decisions you make later on. There are a few different ways the ending can play out.
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I'm usually not into linear VNs, but you've developed quite the story here. It's longer than other linear VNs I've played already and it's just the first chapter. Definitely looking forward to Chapter 2.
Interesting to say the least! Though a small bit of critisim. The story so far is rather stuck in the main character's head. Having the main character tell the players how they think or feel isn't a bad thing per say, but it's one of those things that can really bog the story down if your not careful. The story is already kind of exposition heavy right now, so adding the additional internal musing kind of slows the pace down a bit too much. It's fine if you want to make a main character that is thoughtful, just make sure that the main character gets pulled out of his own head fairly regularly. In fact it could make for some good character dynamics if you want to pursue it.
I'll take that into account. It's a tough thing to balance, however Reamus is his own character. He will have his own opinions on what happens in the story.
It's been a few days so I could be misremembering, but doesn't Alen actually notice the MC kind of spacing out in his own head? I thought there was a line about that. So it seems like it's a personality trait rather than overexposition.
Aykm (Are you kidding me???)
Well, hopefully you can find something useful in there. I could always write a more detailed review later, after I finished, just so you know. ;)
I don't know for how much longer the game goes on, but I had to write it now. This could possibly be the best written visual novel, I've ever read. No Joke. Everyone knows Tennis Ace, Echo, Extracurricular Activities, Morenatsu, Repeat, Adastra, maybe WSSAP (Wolfstar Sins and Paradise) too and many more ...So, after having read the fate of Reamus for a while now, I'm pretty much certain [Pervader] takes it up a notch. The story flows along, draws you right in and is just really captivating.
I wonder, if you can beat Major\Minor to it. That game is indeed a visual novel, though there's no romance involving the protagonist. The speciality lays in it's relatively dark (not as dark as Echo, as a way point), fantastic fantasy story.
Well, back to your game. I simply love it, and think about supporting you on Patreon, like I have done and do for a few other visual novel creators.
If you can keep up the quality of the writing, that I believe you can, then you are on making something magnificent. The premise is at least as good as, and reminds me of Project Aego, for some reason. A game, which is no longer in development sadly. Now that I braught PA up, I have to ask. Is Pervader going to be a horror game, or have horror elements? I actually like horror to some extent, but please... No more Echo-like horror! (And there's even a prequel *shudder*) I would go so far to calling it on a similar level frightening, as Lovecraftian horror, because there's no hoping of a better future either, so to say. Although, Call of Cthulhu is a great game. And yes, I also like Lovecraftian, a lot, but not with romance... A happy ending is a must-have in a love story, don't you think? If there's one good one then there can be as many atrocious one's as needed.
Wait, Ahh I see. A comment down under spoilers it. In the end, I don't have to ask at least. ^^
I can't believe I've got so lucky, to have found Pervader, when it was launched only a day ago... You honestly should make this pay to play, but the fact you don't makes the game propably even better for most.
~from Germany, as we say: I wish you success! (not luck, or let's say both, if that sounds better)
PS: Everyone in search for more visual novels of the same kind, look on my profile. It has pretty much all good furry VN's itch has to offer. ;) (Of course there are more outside of itch, some I do know of as well) Tell me, should I have missed some.
I still have to play tons, tons which can only be played on a pc, yeah....
The game isn't horror, but there are some dark moments in the game. I'm sure you'll be happy to see what's in store!
Discovering new, better VN's doesn't make sense to you? Mind your own business, thanks... I mean what I say, and I never lie! (Only people, who lie, would not believe me) Maybe I do exaggerate sometimes, but I am honestly hyped for these games. Many show a great amount of potential. With this one having the most, in my opinion, because it's not the typical highschool VN. I used to read absolute tons of books, so I know what I'm talking about. The longest book series I read is also the longest science-fiction book series, with 144 books currently. Name's Perry Rhodan.
Yes, this I admit. Although, Pervader is so well written that it's astonishing. More dialogues, as one of the other commenters mentioned, is the only thing that needs adjustment. Btw, out of all the about 30 VN's I played, Pervader really seems to be the best written one.
Do you not have more and better accusations?
wowwwwwwww the length and quality of the first build is incredible. im excited to see how the story pans out
This game has a lot of potential. I really love this and the story so far is great! Can't wait for the further updates of it.
You can become intimate (in all the ways you can imagine) with either Alen or Jymsar. Hope you find them pleasing ;)
Nope, sorry! He doesn't swing that way.
I think Sam is a bit more fluffy. They're just the same species and they are two different artists
I'm ashamed to say I haven't picked up Smoke Room yet.
This was one of the best demos I've ever played, and I've played lots. The writing was superb, the backgrounds were masterfully drawn (at some point I couldn't tell if they were pictures or drawings!) and the chracters are all nicely written and designed. I hope this project grows. I suggest adding expressions (but perhaps you're already working on those?) And considering that you're working on this alone, this is a top-notch beginning. Keep going, dude.
Yes, new sprites with different expressions are in the works. Thank you!
just finished the demo. very good so far
Looks very promissing, can't wait to see what the future holds for this VN. Damn, the panthers are smoking hot! Keep up the good work! :)
This promises to be a masterpiece. The very concept summed on this page is captivating enough to me but the actual game makes it all sound more interesting and real in some sense. It comes to show how much thought you've put into this project over the years.
The fact you're doing this all by yourself... huge props to you. Your art style is really good, both for characters and background. You really set the ambiance and mood of the scene with your use of colors. Hell, even the music selection is good! The way you redact and unfold the story just caters to me in so many ways too.
I'm hyped for what's to come. You've got me this engaged with just the first part of the first act and honestly? I can't wait. I'll definitely support you financially as soon as life permits me to.
Also, MC is a fuckin snack.
You are too kind!
Wrong! This deserves praise for being your first time making a VN AND doing it all alone. It's just too good!!
Definitely an interesting start! Hope the project goes well for you!
Glad you enjoy, and thanks for the well wishes!
I just played through the current version, and I haven't been so engaged in a VN since I found Repeat, which is my currently my favorite VN of all time. Really hopeful for this and can't wait for the future of this. If I could support you financially right now I 100% would.
Hope to keep you interested with future chapters!
is this nsfw?
At this time it is SFW.
Will it be NSFW in the future?
Yes. It will be a while till we get there though.
That's wonderful to know. Can't wait! :)
1. So far this build is SFW, but things will change in the future.
2. It's mostly linear in that it follows one main plot thread. You will be asked to choose either of your companions as your interest, at which point the story diverges for one chapter and comes back together. Afterwards there will be slight variations to the story based on your route and a few other decisions you make later on. There are a few different ways the ending can play out.
3. I'll work on an Android release soon.
Yes, I do all the graphics.
Report any bugs or suggestions to gigasaddle@gmail.com
Discord channel will be a thing, probably next month.