The worldbuilding of the story is really well done, that I can say. I also appreciate the characterization especially with characters like Harren and Jymsar.
The art is also a fresh thing to see, but I can't help but notice that in earlier parts of the story, Alen pretty much has this same expression. Either that or I am blind. The music is also really nice to hear. You can feel its ominous and eery vibes sometimes and more than often, it's calming to hear.
The writing style personally feels decent, but boring. I feel as if it would be nice if we could see a bit more showing rather than telling, though to be fair, things are different with books and visual novels.
I also find it boring how Alen becomes this info dump character who tells Reamus everything about magic. While telling the audience of info about your world is important, doing it too much may sometimes cause the readers to be bored out of it. Some of the information presented isn't even utilized properly (such as the scene about the sigils and their shapes and what they mean.) Instead of creating a captivating experience for the readers, info dumps like this often cause the story to be some quite ~interesting~ lecture instead ( or something).
As for the MC (or Reamus), though it's just my opinion, I'd like to see him characterized a bit further than the simple nice guy in the story who's interested in magic. It's nice to get to see his thoughts over on dialogue, but I hope to see Reamus of being his own unique character.
These are all my opinions, though. Please take it all with a grain of salt, but I also hope it helps a bit.
This story is amazing! I love how well it flows so far and how fleshed out this world is. Also, Jymsar is best boy, he may be a little rough around the edges, but I have a feeling he's going to come around to magic eventually. Excited for the next update to see if the gang gets a dagger or has to go to Tinderhall (I think that's how you spell it, sorry if it's not) to get one.
Hi! I read this story on my live streams and my audience and I adore it :3. I'm such a huge fan of how well everything is written. I also don't know what to expect from this story, and I like that! The relationship development between the characters always feels so organic too, never contrived. I'm so excited for the next update!
Hope you are taking care of yourself and not get too overworked! Especially handling both the writing and the art.
No rushes to update! Good things take time, and sometimes good things have to take a back seat when other things cannot wait.
I'm hoping there will be a gallery function in future when the CGs are unlocked. Would love to be able to conveniently pick shots of handsome men in various states of undress, to gawk at. And I'm hoping there will be lots of of those eventually.
I don't comment often however I do want to say this. The world building that is going on is amazing. The magic system from what it has been reveled might be in my top ten favorites. with that said, I am a sucker for worlds with interesting magic systems. I'm very excited to see where the story does.
Cuando saldrá el juego en español es que me gusta bastante la historia, pero es difícil traducirlo en el traductor Google y casi siempre me pierdo pls en español
Hi, I'm liking the story so far. :) I noticed you wrote about Alen & Jymsar sprites needing more attention. I don't know if you're already done with that / how much you're changing them, but I figured I could make a suggestion of some minor edits for Jymsar:
Basically, in the current art his shoulders are a bit asymmetrical, and the nose&eyes are rotated different ways, making his head feel slightly warped. And finally, the left cheek is more pointed and forward than his right cheek.
Sorry for the unsolicited comment - the art is great already, better than what I can draw. :) Feel free to disregard my comment if you disagree, it's just my subjective opinion.
Hmm you're right, my face change does make it more human-ish, probably a bit too much. I still think there's something slightly odd going on with the face, as if he's tilting his head a little, but his snout isnt tilted with his head.
Maybe something like this? I tried keeping puma-like proportions while still trying to make all his head-parts have the same rotation.
The symmetrical anchor marked in pink (his upper shoulders) is by far the most obvious outlier, and the only one I'd suggest is an 'error', the rest could very well be stylistic choice.
Another thing I just noticed is that his hair tuft goes over what we see as his left eye, making me see it as an eyebrow. It makes the face look a little more asymmetrical than it is...
Worth noticing that Im only reacting to this facial asymmetry on this 'sorta sad' expression - the smiling/laughing face looks great. Im just nitpicking this specific one because it's used a lot.
Hello I'm not done with this update yet but I was wondering if you know when the next one will come out and I am also wondering if and when it will become "intimate" I apologise for bad grammer lol
Thank you for the response can't wait and I love this game and it's hard to believe that your doing it all alone must be a lot of work again thank you for response
I've enjoyed your game so far, so thanks for all your hard work. Thumbs up! : D
Here are things I'd personally like to see implemented:
- more gestures of the characters (which would require more artworks, I guess ^__^') - artwork of the main character in the dialogues, ideally with a range of different gestures and facial expressions (I mean he's gorgeous - don't hide his beauty from us! x'D)
What I've enjoyed so far:
- vivid storytelling and overall theme - your color palette chosen for the characters and backgrounds - the amount of detail put into the artworks overall
Great update! I really enjoyed it. The CGs, the music, and the writing are each respectively beautifully done and are also just, very well put together, this feeling of unison is what drawn me into the story and what encourages me to dive into the mentality of each character.
The second half of the story where it showcases the tension between Jymsar and Chilas feels so realistic, especially of right now with so many groups of people holding uneasy feelings about one another. Everybody suffered because of the other side, everybody is the victim, and neither can or wants to let go because they believe in themselves and what they stood for.
I did not expect this update to have so much content, that was a nice surprise. The story so far is turning out very engaging and I love new Jymsar's sprites. Can't wait for the next update!!
It won't let me install the newest version on Android. I can download the apk file, but when I try to install it from there it says "app not installed"
I've encountered this issue as well, but I don't know how to fix it. Make sure to back up your saves if you try this, but you can delete the previous version and then it should allow you to install the new version without any error.
I guess cause of theire phone Memory. It's with my phone the same problem. I musst have more then 3% memory free. Or the game don't changed anything in the important codes. Then it things that'd the same version like before of the game.
It has really been worth all this waiting, I really enjoyed every minute of this update, the picturesque landscapes, characters and story is great, and the music, the music is amazing, excellent work. I look forward to the next update.
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My thoughts and criticisms
The worldbuilding of the story is really well done, that I can say. I also appreciate the characterization especially with characters like Harren and Jymsar.
The art is also a fresh thing to see, but I can't help but notice that in earlier parts of the story, Alen pretty much has this same expression. Either that or I am blind. The music is also really nice to hear. You can feel its ominous and eery vibes sometimes and more than often, it's calming to hear.
The writing style personally feels decent, but boring. I feel as if it would be nice if we could see a bit more showing rather than telling, though to be fair, things are different with books and visual novels.
I also find it boring how Alen becomes this info dump character who tells Reamus everything about magic. While telling the audience of info about your world is important, doing it too much may sometimes cause the readers to be bored out of it. Some of the information presented isn't even utilized properly (such as the scene about the sigils and their shapes and what they mean.) Instead of creating a captivating experience for the readers, info dumps like this often cause the story to be some quite ~interesting~ lecture instead ( or something).
As for the MC (or Reamus), though it's just my opinion, I'd like to see him characterized a bit further than the simple nice guy in the story who's interested in magic. It's nice to get to see his thoughts over on dialogue, but I hope to see Reamus of being his own unique character.
These are all my opinions, though. Please take it all with a grain of salt, but I also hope it helps a bit.
Also more pics of reamus please thanks jk
Thank you. I appreciate the feedback!
It's been a "few" days and nothing. Is there a delay or something?
Clearly. It would be nice if Gigasaddle gave us something though :(
Soon
will there be an option to skip the nsfw parts?
or are they integral to the plot if they are i assume they will have an image can there be an option to hide said image
The new NSFW content will be completely optional side content.
i really want the nsfw bc of reason..
I like your pic
its not mine tho, i stole it..
Who will get the nsfw scene?
any news?
Not me neglecting my homework to wait on these novels😩
I literally check this everyday once or twice hoping the new nsfw update is already out.
Me too!
Yuh!
sfw or nah?
Funny you should ask.
SFW right now, but there will be NSFW content in the next update.
I kinda want to see what Jymsar would look like in the sheets.
You'll have to wait a while longer for that.
This story is amazing! I love how well it flows so far and how fleshed out this world is. Also, Jymsar is best boy, he may be a little rough around the edges, but I have a feeling he's going to come around to magic eventually. Excited for the next update to see if the gang gets a dagger or has to go to Tinderhall (I think that's how you spell it, sorry if it's not) to get one.
Hi! I read this story on my live streams and my audience and I adore it :3. I'm such a huge fan of how well everything is written. I also don't know what to expect from this story, and I like that! The relationship development between the characters always feels so organic too, never contrived. I'm so excited for the next update!
Hope you are taking care of yourself and not get too overworked! Especially handling both the writing and the art.
No rushes to update! Good things take time, and sometimes good things have to take a back seat when other things cannot wait.
I'm hoping there will be a gallery function in future when the CGs are unlocked. Would love to be able to conveniently pick shots of handsome men in various states of undress, to gawk at. And I'm hoping there will be lots of of those eventually.
What can I say? I'm a bit of a perv for these Pervaders, myself.
Early January should be good.
Still fingers crossed for a Christmas update :3
Sorry, not yet!
I'm so desperate for the next update, like I'm literally dying!!! Anyhow, as you can tell I enjoy the VN very much <3
aw that sucks, well anyways, merry christmas Giga!
I don't comment often however I do want to say this. The world building that is going on is amazing. The magic system from what it has been reveled might be in my top ten favorites. with that said, I am a sucker for worlds with interesting magic systems. I'm very excited to see where the story does.
oh two other notes. Anatole, is adorable. <3 and I love the music
So will the romance bits come in build 5 or 6?
Nope, after that
Alright thanks
Cuando saldrá el juego en español es que me gusta bastante la historia, pero es difícil traducirlo en el traductor Google y casi siempre me pierdo pls en español
Will there be an update this month?
Maybe...
I'd like to get it out for Chirstmas, but we'll see
Alrighty! No worries :)
Hi, I'm liking the story so far. :) I noticed you wrote about Alen & Jymsar sprites needing more attention. I don't know if you're already done with that / how much you're changing them, but I figured I could make a suggestion of some minor edits for Jymsar:
https://imgur.com/a/bFpOuHi
Basically, in the current art his shoulders are a bit asymmetrical, and the nose&eyes are rotated different ways, making his head feel slightly warped. And finally, the left cheek is more pointed and forward than his right cheek.
Sorry for the unsolicited comment - the art is great already, better than what I can draw. :) Feel free to disregard my comment if you disagree, it's just my subjective opinion.
I actually agree on the shoulders...but the face change makes him look a little TOO humanoid
Hmm you're right, my face change does make it more human-ish, probably a bit too much. I still think there's something slightly odd going on with the face, as if he's tilting his head a little, but his snout isnt tilted with his head.
Maybe something like this? I tried keeping puma-like proportions while still trying to make all his head-parts have the same rotation.
https://imgur.com/a/XTpH32K
https://imgur.com/a/86opLJq
The symmetrical anchor marked in pink (his upper shoulders) is by far the most obvious outlier, and the only one I'd suggest is an 'error', the rest could very well be stylistic choice.
Another thing I just noticed is that his hair tuft goes over what we see as his left eye, making me see it as an eyebrow. It makes the face look a little more asymmetrical than it is...
Worth noticing that Im only reacting to this facial asymmetry on this 'sorta sad' expression - the smiling/laughing face looks great. Im just nitpicking this specific one because it's used a lot.
Yeah I saw what you were talking about...the change looks good :)
Noted, thank you
I love the story and drawings so much! Thank you so much for this astonishing VN!😊
If i may ask, what are the character that has a route in this game?
Is the 'marshal' guy has a route? I actually dont know if its his name or what not lol
The only routes are Alen and Jymsar.
Awww i see, Thank you for replying
Jymsar confirmed gae. YEET!
Hello I'm not done with this update yet but I was wondering if you know when the next one will come out and I am also wondering if and when it will become "intimate" I apologise for bad grammer lol
I'm pretty bad with deadlines, so I try not to say anymore.
As far as intimacy goes, you'll be able to pick your route at the end of 0.6, which is after the next update (0.5).
Thank you for the response can't wait and I love this game and it's hard to believe that your doing it all alone must be a lot of work again thank you for response
Hi GigaSaddle! : 3
I've enjoyed your game so far, so thanks for all your hard work. Thumbs up! : D
Here are things I'd personally like to see implemented:
- more gestures of the characters (which would require more artworks, I guess ^__^')
- artwork of the main character in the dialogues, ideally with a range of different gestures and facial expressions (I mean he's gorgeous - don't hide his beauty from us! x'D)
What I've enjoyed so far:
- vivid storytelling and overall theme
- your color palette chosen for the characters and backgrounds
- the amount of detail put into the artworks overall
So... please keep up the good work, okay? ^____^
Thanks!
Can't wait for the next update :3
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Is the current build nsfw? I know you've said it will be nsfw at some point.
Really enjoying this vn :)
Not yet, but we're getting closer
:D
Your getting closer....how close?😉simp;)
The way it's written is pure bliss, just like a spell!
Eu simplismente amei, a historia fico muito boa serio mesmo, eu terminei o jogo agora e vim pra ca para dar 5 estrelas
Ayee I couldn't wait any longer! Usually I wait for a few more updates but I can't anymore I gotta read dis now... Ha! I'm too Ficken addicted to this
Great update! I really enjoyed it. The CGs, the music, and the writing are each respectively beautifully done and are also just, very well put together, this feeling of unison is what drawn me into the story and what encourages me to dive into the mentality of each character.
The second half of the story where it showcases the tension between Jymsar and Chilas feels so realistic, especially of right now with so many groups of people holding uneasy feelings about one another. Everybody suffered because of the other side, everybody is the victim, and neither can or wants to let go because they believe in themselves and what they stood for.
Great update! Will we be expecting an update next month, next three month, or just when it's ready?
Always when it's ready.
Hopefully this month.
Thank you for new update giga. I am so excited
Stay save<3
Thanks and enjoy!
Is there a love interest in this game?
I guess so.
Umm who is it?
I guess it will be the knight.
You will be able to romance either Jymsar or Alen
I'm soooo excited thank u <3
I did not expect this update to have so much content, that was a nice surprise. The story so far is turning out very engaging and I love new Jymsar's sprites. Can't wait for the next update!!
It won't let me install the newest version on Android. I can download the apk file, but when I try to install it from there it says "app not installed"
I'm having the same problem :(
I've encountered this issue as well, but I don't know how to fix it. Make sure to back up your saves if you try this, but you can delete the previous version and then it should allow you to install the new version without any error.
I guess cause of theire phone Memory. It's with my phone the same problem. I musst have more then 3% memory free. Or the game don't changed anything in the important codes. Then it things that'd the same version like before of the game.
definitely not a memory issue here
Just some things that would be the reasons
I dunno why, but I can't download the new update😔
Can you tell me where are you trying to download it from? What platform are you on? What error is it giving you?
Is 0.4.1 a fix of something?
Just some spelling and other minor errors.
Ah, ok. Good to know!
It has really been worth all this waiting, I really enjoyed every minute of this update, the picturesque landscapes, characters and story is great, and the music, the music is amazing, excellent work. I look forward to the next update.
Thank you! I hope I can deliver the next update sooner this time